the diagram below shows the steps in the process of manufacturing yogurt. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram
highlight
information about the direction of manufacturing Correct subject-verb agreement
highlights
yogurt
which Change the spelling
yoghurt
have
7 steps.
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has
Firstly
, the milk is poured Linking Words
to
a pan, and it is Change preposition
into
being
heated Unnecessary verb
apply
at
the right temperature. It is being heated for 30 minutes or more, the longer it is being heated the thicker it will be. After that, the milk is cooled at 44 Change preposition
to
degree
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degrees
celcius
or 112 Change the capitalization
Celcius
fahrenteit
.
Correct your spelling
Fahrenheit
Next
, put the Linking Words
yogurt
starter or live bacteria into the milk and let it grow Change the spelling
yoghurt
in
Change preposition
at
the
temperature of 37 Correct article usage
a
degree
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degrees
celcius
or 100 Change the capitalization
Celcius
fahrenheit
for 4 hours. After 4 hours, the incubation will stop when it is put in a cold place.
Now, Change the capitalization
Fahrenheit
the
it is ready to be mixed with other ingredients, Remove the article
apply
for
Linking Words
instance
strawberry, sugar, or other kinds of sweeteners and fruits. Add the comma(s)
,instance
The
Change preposition
In the
last
step, the Linking Words
yogur
is put inside a container and it is labelled by the company, and it is ready to be sent to all the Correct your spelling
yoghurt
your
supermarket
.Fix the agreement mistake
supermarkets
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