the diagram below shows the steps in the process of manufacturing yogurt. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

the diagram below shows the steps in the process of manufacturing yogurt. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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information about the direction of manufacturing
yogurt
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which
have
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7 steps.
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, the milk is poured
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a pan, and it is
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heated
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the right temperature. It is being heated for 30 minutes or more, the longer it is being heated the thicker it will be. After that, the milk is cooled at 44
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celcius
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or 112
fahrenteit
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Fahrenheit
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, put the
yogurt
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starter or live bacteria into the milk and let it grow
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temperature of 37
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celcius
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or 100
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for 4 hours. After 4 hours, the incubation will stop when it is put in a cold place. Now,
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it is ready to be mixed with other ingredients,
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strawberry, sugar, or other kinds of sweeteners and fruits.
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last
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step, the
yogur
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yoghurt
your
is put inside a container and it is labelled by the company, and it is ready to be sent to all the
supermarket
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