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Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a woman’s role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice

#people #women #chances #work #careers #woman’s #role #care #house #children #support #choice
In my opinion,
yes women’s
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yes, women’s
 should be given
equal chance
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an equal chance
.
in
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In
 today’s fast developing
world there
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world, there
 is no difference between women and man. Both share
same stage
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the same stage
 and have equal rights to choose their leaving. Our fundamental rights are same for both.
we
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We
 should not limit women to household works. They have very good talent and have ability to
work
 in multi task manner, managing the house and
work
 together.
the
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The
 belief that a girl should only learn
house
the work of cleaning and running a house
housework
work
 and take care are old they were true in ancient time when humans use to
work
 only in farms.
that
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That
 time the
work
 was divided between the two partners one will
work
 out in the farm and other will take care
for
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of
 other thing required for
there
of them or themselves
their
 daily leavings. But today humans have become more modern and more
cevilized
having a high state of culture and development both social and technological
civilized
civilised
.
in
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In
 todays fast pace lifestyle you cannot depend only one person earning, both have to share
there
of them or themselves
their
 responsibility.
there
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There
 are many
womans
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
woman
 who have reached to the top most position in
there
of them or themselves
their
 career, they have marked
there
of them or themselves
their
 presence in all fields
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of
 corporate
,
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,
defiance
,
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,
 science and research.
women’s
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Women’s
also
 have a strong presence in politics.
in
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In
 some countries world are lead by women’s
in
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In
 my
opinion we
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opinion, we
 should not
limited
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limit
 or cut the wings of women by not allowing them to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
there
of them or themselves
their
 career dreams.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Women empowerment
  • Breaking stereotypes
  • Equal opportunities
  • Career advancement
  • Progressive societies
  • Work-life balance
  • Changing perceptions
  • Successful women
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