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Some think that only those people who have worked for a company for many years should be promoted to a higher position. Do you agree?

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There is an opinion that
primarily
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primary
 staff members who have dedicated many years to working for a particular
company
 should be given executive positions in a
company
. I disagree with
this
viewpoint in as
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viewpoint as
 much as younger workers may have more skills and if not provided with an opportunity for a promotion, they will become
demotivated
.
Although
 senior employees
have proved
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have proven
 to be reliable and loyal, more often than not, it is novices who have a wider cluster of actual skills.
This
 is because young specialists exert their full effort in mastering their hard and soft skills in order to meet the requirements of today’s highly competitive job market. Yet another reason why less experienced staff members should have even chances for a promotion is that
otherwise
 they will not be motivated to do their best. Knowing that
however
 hard they try, they still will not be given a higher position in a
company
, young employees are likely to grow reluctant to go
extra mile
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the extra mile
, which may negatively affect a
company
’s revenue and curb its development. To illustrate, a prominent IT Entrepreneur Pavel Durov had to leave his workplace
since despite
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since, despite
 his outstanding abilities, he was not rewarded with a leading role.
As a result
, he successfully set up his own business while his employer lost his
company
 due to lack of highly qualified workers. To sum up, even though individuals who have worked fewer years for a particular
company
 might be less trustworthy, they should be equally promoted as they have up-to-date knowledge and skill sets.
Besides
 that,
this
 will encourage them to apply their abilities to the fullest,
thus
 contributing to the prosperity of a
company
.
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