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nformation technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benifits of IT outweigh the disadvantages.

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People are living a better and more accomplished life due to the increased
use
 of
technology
 which has changed several aspects of our lives and in
use
 in different areas of life.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages which IT has given to the
world
 when compared to the disadvantages as been discussed in some quarters.
Firstly
, in terms of communication and collaboration, IT has helped to bridge the communication gap. The
use
 of email, short message service and chats means we can talk to one another irrespective of where we are in the
world
 seamlessly. By using these methods, you can talk or see one another virtually irrespective of the distance between us.
WhatsApp
 video calls are an example of how it can be used to reach other people anywhere they are in the
world
.
Secondly
, its
use
 in healthcare. Virtual reality has taken over medical procedures in the hospitals as it is used to perform surgical operations making it easier to save lives without having to cut open human beings. By using virtual reality, a specialist surgeon is not required to be physically present to carry out a procedure but can
use
 the Internet to achieve
this
.
This
technology
 has been used a procedure to remove an appendix.
Thirdly
, in the area of automation. Several car manufacturing companies have deployed
technology
 to assemble cars rather than
use
 human beings who are prone to mistakes. By programming machines to assemble cars, the process is much faster, more productive and more efficient leading to better cars on the roads. Companies
such
 as Honda, Toyota and Hyhundai are leading examples in
this
 sector. In conclusion,
technology
 has done more good than harm to the society than
initially
 thought and the continuous improvement of it will make the
world
 a better place to live in.
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