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In many parts of the world families were larger in the past because people had more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a big family in past ?

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Past century, family size has decreased significantly and families are smaller now. I can say that there were some benefits of living in a big family, but I think there were serious drawbacks. I believe there were 2 main benefits,
Firstly
, kids had brothers and sisters which they could support each other. If kids had any problems in their life they could always find a place to turn to; their home.
Secondly
, at the past children helped their family by working in the house or working out of the house because big-sized family expenses were too much. I think
such
 families did more harm to their children,
Firstly
, parents could not give so much attention to all of their children.
Secondly
, financial issues could affect big families,
for example
, education costs were for all children and parents could not afford that. In summary, the positive about being a part of a large family is less than its negatives as we consider factors of living expenses or education.

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