Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the modern era, where people are overloaded with various stresses,

happiness

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plays a crucial role to maintain the active lifestyle, which means not just being physically

fir

meeting adequate standards for a purpose

fit

but mentally as well. While some people argue that teenagers live a happy life without any burden on their shoulders, others are of the opinion that,

adulting

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makes them confident and satisfied.

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essay shall discuss why childhood is not always like a

fairytale

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fairy tale

, and why I believe adulthood is more joyful. A common believe is that, every child must

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have

been a luxurious

childhood but

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childhood, but

most of the

children whether

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children, whether

in developed or developing countries often lack the experience of real

happiness

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of being a teenager. Some children are blessed with financially stable family who looks after their child's every demand. Below poverty line or poor families,

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, still struggle for their basic needs

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as food, clothing and shelter. Even if they fulfil their daily basic amenities, these families have not

sense

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sensed

the feeling of a free hand when it comes to money matters.

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such

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families could not even afford toys or video games which are essential for teenager's

happiness

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rapidly growing world. Despite the rough teenage years, others believe, myself included, that being an adult gives much more satisfaction even if there are added responsibilities

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as family and friends.

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not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

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words, after a certain age, individual

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steps according to their capacity.

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, an adult is often aware of what he or she can afford at the moment and

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alter their

mind

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minds

by making rational decisions.

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, adulthood

always give

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always gives

the motive to do hard work and grab opportunities to feel the real

happiness

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because of their consistent efforts. In conclusion, even though few teenagers have a wonderful and stress free

childhood but

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childhood, but

strong

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strongly

believe that adulthood gives us the reason to celebrate our hard work and our achievements throughout the life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

324 words

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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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