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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however believe that there are better alternative ways to reducing crime. Discuss both views and give our opinion.

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There is a widespread misconception that if the duration of the prison sentences is augmented, the
crime
rate
 can be controlled.
However
, there are others who challenge the above view and say that, there are various other ways to contain the
crime
rate
 in the
society
. I share my firm opinion with the latter.
This
 essay will share both the views and support my arguments. On one hand, there is no solid determination in controlling the
crime
rate
besides
 imprisoning people.
For example
, the countries that strictly follow communist policies are afraid that, if there is an uprising movement commenced by the people against their government, it would unseat their iron fist control over their territorial sovereignty. Owing to
this
, their judiciary is forced to hand them death sentences or served them long duration of prison sentences, without assessing the reasons behind the uprising movement
by
Suggestion
of
 the people. If one deeply perceives
such
 judgements, it makes no benefit to contain the
crime
rate
, rather than provoking the people.
Thus
, the ill-fated judiciary delivers the travesty of justice.
On the other hand
, there are countries who are concerned about bringing down the
crime
rate
 by building a better
society
.
For example
, the countries in the Nordic region have begun to close their empty prisons, because people have not committed any crimes since 3 decades. They have achieved
this
 success by providing proper mental and psychological support to the people right from the adolescent age in schools. It is easier to control the misdemeanour by nipping in the bud, rather than allowing it to grow wild.
Moreover
, these countries have placed tight controls on their population density.
Therefore
, lesser the number of people will result in lesser the number of
crime
 rates. To recapitulate,
crime
rate
 cannot be resisted just by extending the prison punishments. No-one commit crimes voluntarily, only their vulnerabilities forces them to lose their senses and push them to commit crimes.
Hence
, the
society
 should be rebuilt in
such
 a way that one’s vulnerabilities should be addressed in order to convert a dystopian
society
 into a
society
 of utopia.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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