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Crime is a big problem in the world; and many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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One of the major problems in todays world is the
crime
. Many people think that no one can do anything to prevent the
crime
. I completely disagree with the view and
this
 essay will highlight some of the key points regarding my point of view.
Crime
 is increasing every in our daily life and whenever we turn on our television or radio we can see that some
crime
 is happening somewhere in the world. We notice that every country is taking many actions to reduce the
crime
rate
 and punishing those who breaks the law. But we do not see any hint that the
crime
rate
 is decreasing around the globe.
As a result
, many people have become hopeless and they have started to think that there is nothing to do to stop the
crime
. My opinion is completely different from that view because I believe no matter how much the
crime
rate
 is increased, there is always a solution. I think only tightening the law and order will not help to fight the
crime
. We have to find the root cause of all the
crime
 and solve that problem. I believe the main problem is the fact that people are becoming immoral
day
 by
day
. The core values of human being are decreasing and people are consumed by greed, money, wealth and other material things.
As a result
, they can do anything even break the law in order to get what they want. My solution to
this
 problem is to give emphasis on the moral teaching of children from a very early age. Both family and educational institutions should give moral training the highest priority. If the children get moral training,
then
 our
next
 generation will see a
crime
 free time. To summarize, we can say that even though the
crime
rate
 seems to be increasing
day
 by
day
, we should not lose our hope and try our best to fight against the
crime
 in all possible ways. If we all work together, only
then
 we will be able to defeat the
crime
 and our future generation will live in a peaceful world.
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