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Nowadays, some parents pressure their children to be successful. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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There’s a huge amount of
pressure
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 on children to be successful in life from their parents. The reasons of the
pressure
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is
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 that parents always want the best for their children and they believe that success requires parental
pressure
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. In my opinion,
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 is a negative development which can lead to mental problems and impact negatively academic performance afterwards in life. Parents have a belief that future job prospects and high salary packages result of academic background. Because of
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 belief, they have high expectations for their children and these parental pressures the children to succeed later on. A study has shown that the reason of parental
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 is that parents justifiably consider that their children have a respectable job, earn a high salary and stand on their own feet.
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, children are pressed by their parents. Despite the fact that it seems as if parental
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 is an effective and justifiable factor in a child’s success, parental
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 can result in mental problems and affect children’s academic performance in a negative way. Various studies found that parental
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 causes severe consequences
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 as depression and anxiety, including stress, which can impact negatively both students’ test scores and social life.
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, a research group showed that
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 doesn’t benefit children in succeeding at school. By the contrast, the research group concluded that there is a link between the low test scores and
pressure
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. In conclusion, parental
pressure
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 is resulting from
that parents
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that, parents
 create high expectations for the
chidren
a young person of either sex
children
 nowadays.
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 it seems as if
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pressure
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 is in
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promote over another
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 of children, it
can comes
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can come
 with mental health problems later on.

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