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Some think that politicians should always be honest while others feel that there are times when they must lie. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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While some
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people
 believe that political leaders should be true to society at all times,
whereas
 others claim that they must lie at certain times. In my opinion, I believe that they should stay honest considering the trust that
people
 have in them and the responsibility they hold to protect their civilians.
This
 essay will discuss both views and share my opinion in detail with relevant examples. On the one hand, some
people
 believe that politicians should be honest.
This
 is mainly because the majority of the decisions are influenced by
such
 government officials considering the well-being of
people
, so they should be trustworthy rather than manipulators.
In addition
,
people
 have their belief that they protect the best interests of citizens in addressing national or social issues. If they suspect that they are lying,
such
 behaviour would never be tolerated and create significant impacts on society.
As a result
,
people
 will never believe anything they ever convey regardless of the significance.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that it is acceptable to lie at some times.
In other words
, if there is a situation that compels them to hide the truth for the benefit of
people
 and the community it is considered acceptable.
However
,
such
 opportunities should not inculcate the habit of lying because the role they are serving is incredibly important to maintain order in society.
For example
, in India,
people
 lose their belief in political officials because they never satisfy their promises to
people
.
To conclude
, in my opinion, it's better to stay true to the nation regardless of situations to hold the trust of
people
 because if it is lost it can never be gained which will impact the political stability.
As a result
,
such
 leaders will never be a leader again.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integrity
  • transparency
  • ethical dilemma
  • diplomatic tact
  • misinformation
  • public trust
  • social fabric
  • national security
  • pragmatic politics
  • democratic principles
  • accountability
  • role models
  • grey area
  • public perception
  • preventive secrecy
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