Today, the high sales of consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent times, the demand

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for

consumer goods has increased rapidly.

Thesedays

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These days

, the consumption of consumer goods

have increased

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has increased

due to the strong promotion rather than the increase of real need. I completely agree with

this

statement and will elaborate my point of view in subsequent paragraphs. In

last few years

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the last few years

power

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the power

of advertising has changed the buying pattern of consumer goods.

Few years

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A few years

back people used to buy those things that they need,

however

, nowadays, the things which are being purchased are luxurious.

For example

, the trend of buying new cars has dramatically increased over the past few years.

Although

, most of the people can not afford it to buy on their own, they take loans from banks and buy it

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even though, they do

not need of their

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not need their

own car but they just get influenced from bank advertisement. After that, the consumption of ready made

food

has

also

increased over the

last

decade or so. Though

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these are extremely bad for health and costly

aswell

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as well

, the sales of these

food

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foods

going

high

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higher

as the time progressing.

For instance

, there was no concept of freezing

food

in 1990's, but today, we can find freezing

food

in almost every house.

Although

, these foods cause heart problems and as well as obesity problems. Even though, people consuming these

foodd

any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue

foods

food

more and more, just because of advertisement they see on television or social networking websites. In conclusion, I would like to say that I agree with the statement that has been given in the question that most of the things people buy these days are the result of strong advertisement rather than they need them.

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Today, the high sales of consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Parents of obese children should be punished for making them fat.

WORK: Most high level positions in companies are filled by men, even though the workforce in many developed countries consists of 50 percent female workers. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of management positions to women. Discuss, what is your opinion?

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