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Childless family has become the norm in many well developed western countries since the post -modern era. There are some benefits of
this
 practice;
however
, disadvantages of
this
also
 equally relevant. On the one hand, one main positive of not having children is that
this
 enables them to acquire the highest position in their career.
In other words
, if
any family
Accept comma addition
any, family
 has children, required to make a significant amount of adjustment to raise them, which may be harmfully affected their career growth. Apart from these, adding a new member to the family not only result in economical burden, but continuously demand commitment towards family
also
. A recent research,
for instance
, has reported that off springs can slow down job related advancement for both husband and wife of the family.
On the other hand
, in many societies childless families never recognised as a functional unit, and these types of couples tend to be exposed many criticisms of their decision.
Similarly
, many psychological studies which have been carried among elder couple.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • lifestyles
  • long working hours
  • prepare meals
  • Regular consumption
  • health issues
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • high levels
  • sugars
  • fats
  • salts
  • economic factors
  • cheaper
  • healthier meal options
  • low-income families
  • students
  • cultural influence
  • global expansion
  • adapting menus
  • local tastes
  • integrating
  • environmental concerns
  • packaging waste
  • carbon footprints
  • meat production
  • traditional cuisine
  • decline
  • culinary heritage
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