"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?
Owing to the problems which
to
prevent Fix the infinitive
apply
health
before it ruins body
than to prevent Correct article usage
the body
health
after it happens. Scientific researchs
have proved that money should be spent Correct your spelling
research
researches
researchers
in
Change preposition
on
preventation
relates aspects rather than investing in Correct your spelling
prevention
research
programme and treating harmful diseases. I strongly agree that precaution is Add an article
a research
the research
highly
Rephrase
more
accepted
than being stable Replace the word
acceptable
with
Change preposition
in
process
of healing. Add an article
the process
Firstly
, individuals and governments invested their partially
funds to safeguard the diseases. Change the adverb
partial
This
method will ensure that the
people will be healthier throughout their lives not after Correct article usage
apply
adopted
by diseases. Add a missing verb
being adopted
For instance
, many doctrine study
speculated, Change to a plural noun
studies
Americans
are Correct word choice
that Americans
awaring
Correct your spelling
aware
awarding
about
Change preposition
of
this
fact, therefore
, they always checked
their body report once Wrong verb form
check
in
a month. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, last
decades
report by WHO said that Americans are fit and there is Change noun form
decade's
lesser
Correct article usage
a lesser
chances
Fix the agreement mistake
chance
to become
unwell. Change preposition
of becoming
However
,Correct determiner usage
these
this
things will have leaded
to a completely healthier Wrong verb form
lead
lifestyles
. Correct the article-noun agreement
lifestyle
Furthermore
, another point to consider is that to deal
earlierChange the verb form
dealing
regarding
Change preposition
with
health
is
accounted for no high bucks waste and not much human Unnecessary verb
apply
efforts
for Fix the agreement mistake
effort
process
of cure. Add an article
the process
This
is to say that this
saved economic currency would help to spent
on other Add a missing verb
be spent
health care
Correct your spelling
healthcare
system
, Fix the agreement mistake
systems
for example
, drugs and injections are becoming considerable
expensive for Change the word
considerably
middle class
families. So, in order toAdd a hyphen
middle-class
improving
Change the verb
improve
poor
Correct article usage
the poor
health
of people is far more essential than for
research programs. Change preposition
apply
Hence
to invest
Change the verb form
investing
for
preventative measures is Change preposition
in
better
way. In conclusion, Add an article
a better
preventation
is cheaper than cure because it doesn't require any Correct your spelling
prevention
researches
and costly treatments after Fix the agreement mistake
research
suffered
from illness. Change the form of the verb
suffering
However
, there would some
need for research Add a missing verb
be some
for
prevention but that Change preposition
on
have
not much Add a missing verb
does have
costleir
.Correct your spelling
cost
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion