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We are living in a throwaway society. Discuss the causes and problems.

#society
We are living in a throwaway
society
 now.There are many causes
,
Accept space
,
one of them is
eassy
posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
easy
internet
 access. Easy
internet
 access is one of the big
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 of
throwaway
Suggestion
the throwaway society
a throwaway society
society
.
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
 is very important and
usefull
being of use or service
useful
 thing in our life if we utilize it properly.But most of us are not using
internet
 properly.In
this
 modern
world
 all things are open in front of you.There are two paths of
this
world
.Those are
,
Accept space
,
honesty and dishonesty.You are independent of choosing any
path
.You have to choose the
path
 of honesty
.
Accept space
.
 If you choose that you can make the proper use of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
.But if you choose another it will very harmful for you and
the
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 for the
world
.But the matter of sorrow the most of
youths
Suggestion
the youths
 is choosing the
second
path
. Another cause of throwaway
society
 is
immorality
Suggestion
immoral
.We all should learn morality from childhood from the family.But the problem is
,
Accept space
,
 in the modern
world
 parents are so busy
,
Accept space
,
thats
Suggestion
that's
 why
the
people in general
they
 can't give
time
objective case of they
them
 to their
childern
a young person of either sex
children
.
As a result
 the children are not
gitting
the act of acquiring something
getting
 the proper
etiquitee
rules governing socially acceptable behavior
etiquette
 and morality in
ther
of them or themselves
their
her
the
 childhood.For
this
 reason when they are growing up and they are
bocoming
according with custom or propriety
becoming
 independent most of them are choosing
wrong
Suggestion
the wrong path
path
, means they are immoral activities.
Some time
Suggestion
Sometime
 they divert and doing terrorism activities. So if we want to
comeback
Suggestion
come back
 from
this
 problem we must have to teach morality and proper
etiquitee
rules governing socially acceptable behavior
etiquette
 in the childhood.
Thus
 we can able to change
this
society
.
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