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Some people believe that to be a successful sportsperson, one needs to have a natural ability. Others think that hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People that aim to be a famous athlete with many achievements are
doubt
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doubting
 themselves how can be one. Individuals born with talents may the answer for that question. But others put a belief in hard- working and practicing that lead to success in sport.
This
 essay will examine both sides of the argument. There are some reasons why they have faith in non-stop training and that can be the best way to success in sport. Because of hard training, individuals can improve their
physicals
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
 and many technics that raise the chance to be a successful
sportsperson
.
Furthermore
, the more they train the higher their knowledge can be used to win a match with other enemies who stand in their way to be famous.
For instance
, Dang Van Lam, a goalkeeper in U23 football team, was born with no gift. But throughout countless of practice and training, he has become a professional player and played for
National football team
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the National football team
.
On the other hand
, talented people are still the main subject of
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 when
taking
an exchange of ideas via conversation
talking
 about a successful sports individual that have
achieve
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achieved
 many
reward
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rewards
 and medal. If gifted persons use that talent in a right field of sports, they will easily surpass many others in the same places as
them
people in general
they
.
In addition
, talents
are giving
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are given
 to their
owner
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own
 limitless of
path
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the path
paths
a path
 to success in a field they choose
in
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from
.
For example
, when a talented basketball player can play
good
Suggestion
well
 in either offence or
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
, they would make great achievements in every position in the match. To be concluded, there is an idiom “Diligence in place of intelligence “. Even thought talented people have a greater start than ordinary ones, I believe in
continue
Suggestion
continuing
 development in normal people that have a big determination in their dream to be a successful person in sports.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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