In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Increasing popularity of Supermarkets and malls are attracting people towards them for purchase
as a result
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small shops are leaving the
business
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. I think it is creating negative impact on small and local
business
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by reducing the
business
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opportunities. In
this
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essay will discuss impacts created by big
business
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and how the shopping culture
have changed
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has changed
.
Firstly
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, huge supermarkets
are attracting
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is attracting
people by the variety of product they offer to customers but in reality, consumer
are ending
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is ending
up buying things which are not necessary. Small shops are exclusive
for
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to
the group of products, whereas in multipurpose stores there
is
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are
multiple sections with various products.
For example
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, local fresh markets only carry vegetables and groceries, but in
supermarket
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the supermarket
they have fresh produce, groceries, dairy, frozen foods, toys, stationary, laundry and home needs.
Secondly
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, when a person
go
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goes
to a small shop to buy specific items, they buy the items needed,
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however when
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however, when
they visit big
supermarkets they
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supermarkets, they
tend to see
various products
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the various products
and buy items which is not necessary
On the other hand
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, it only does not impact the customers it
also
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impacts the small entrepreneur’s
business
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financially and making it hard for them to sustain in the field. When big malls and market enters to a new city usually people are attracted by their advertisement, offers and deals, because of that small
shops
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shop
could not compete with big
business
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and slowly lose their customers.
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, when a big merchant and
retails
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retail
shops get
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shops, get
introduced in growing metropolitan cities, people
wants
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want
to have
better
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the best
shopping experience and start using large shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
for their shopping needs, which directly impacts the number of customer visit in small
retails
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retail
shops and local
business
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and slowly they are pushed away from the
business
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. In conclusion, while big supermarkets and malls are enhancing the shopping experience along with adverse effect on consumers and small
business
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owners.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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