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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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In these recent years there has been a huge rise in online shopping.
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 some feel that there will be no effect on small
business
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. I,
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, believe that there are three factors which will end the era of small
business
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.
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, online shopping companies like Amazon, ebay offers different kinds of instalment facilities to the customers. While I concede that even small shops offers the same kind of service, the problem is that they support only limited finance companies. Whereas online
business
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 allows all types of finances like credit card, overdraft and so on. A good illustration of
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 is Sunday market, In
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 market most of the small
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 does not accept credit cards as they can't afford the transaction charges. Another key factor is twenty four hours shopping and delivery. Many supporters of small
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 claim that many numbers of shops in the city are open round the clock.
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, I would argue that they are open all the time, but the comforts of shopping at your place in the midnight
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 a totally different experience. Beside
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, in many foreign countries the night temperatures tend to be freezing and in
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 weather going out for shopping is dangerous. The final and most worrisome factor is expensive products. More and more small
business
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 often price their products high, because they have to cover all the expenses
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 as rent, labour, transport and so on. Whereas online shopping rarely matter all these things. Take Amazon,
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, they do not have a single physical shop in the whole country, as their maximum operations run through online computers. In short, not only online shopping causes local
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 to go bankrupt, but they
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 change the whole shopping experience to the
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 level.
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. I agree that they will make a huge impact on local street shops.
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