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The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. how far do you agree with this prediction?

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Everybody knows that using the internet is to extend the entire world these days. Even children have addicted to the web somehow.
Nevertheless
, can cyberspace replace traditional course books in schools? Hypertext documents and books are two ways of assimilating knowledge, that both have advantages and disadvantages.
For instance
, there are limitations for online network,
such
 as speed and traffic.
Also
 the information super-highway is yet expensive in undeveloped countries.
On the other hand
, while we
talking
Suggestion
are talking
talk
 about pedagogical classes in cast away villages, the access of the virtual network and devices, are not reachable presumably.
Otherwise
, while we argue about learning and especially long distance learning in villages, we should consider some problems in book usage,
such
 as the possibility of making teacher-led lessons classrooms in villages or lack of supplies in
outlying district
Suggestion
outlying districts
the outlying district
an outlying district
.
Furthermore
, the number of children is the important matter up to a point. According to my view in
conclusion
Suggestion
concluding
 the WWW can replace
instead
 of books in the recent future, because
self-study
Suggestion
the self - study
 is developing between people and gathering data in internet is much more convenient than books and of course it is very
faster
Suggestion
fast
.

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