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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

#television #free-time #people
After a few decades
,
Accept space
,
television
 shows had improved so much which connected
closeknit
Suggestion
close knit
 to human life. People spend
hour
Suggestion
an hour
hours
 and hour front of
television
.So
This
 situation makes us become tired of working
further
 human's relationship goes down. At we start,
television
 makes people lazy and less
time
 for
sociallising
the act of meeting for social purposes
socializing
socialising
 with others. For instant, people used to
spent
Suggestion
spend
 their spare
time
 for family in the old days before the invention of
television
 appears. Now most of our
time
 using for watching
entertainment showcast
Suggestion
the entertainment showcase
entertainment showcase
an entertainment showcase
entertainment showcases
 and staying away each others.
In which makes relationship
Suggestion
Which makes the relationship
In which makes the relationship
 between human and human goes badly.
For example
,
this
 is real
case
events that provide the generative force that is the origin of something
cause
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 had seen
in my neigbhour
Suggestion
my neighbour
in my neighbour
.
Robbers
Suggestion
The robbers
 got inside my
grandmother'house
the mother of your father or mother
grandmothers
 and took one of my motorbike in the way so easy
inspite
 it
happended
come to pass
happened
 in the afternoon.
On
Suggestion
In
By
 contrast,
television
provide
Suggestion
provides
 many
value
Suggestion
valuable
informations
a message received and understood
information
 around the
world but
Accept comma addition
world, but
 we don't have to go out.Many study programmes for
student
Suggestion
the student
students
 is free on
television
 or document about history life
,
Accept space
,
seesighting
,
Accept space
,
people
also
 on
television
.
Therefore
,
Accept space
,
 limiting the
time
 on using
time
 for watching
television
 is
good thing
Suggestion
a good thing
to begin
 with. In my conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
'd like to agree with the statement about using too much
time
 for
television
 is not only make people lazy but
also
 spend less
time
 for
sociallising
the act of meeting for social purposes
socializing
socialising
 with others.
Furthermore
, risky from lazy connect with many diseases
such
 as
obeity
more than average fatness
obesity
,
Accept space
,
stress
,
Accept space
,
less creation
Suggestion
less creative
 and more.Human should spend more
time
 for other activities and social life
instead
 of staying at home
.
Accept space
.
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