some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Often we can hear from friends 'Better you gave him
money
than
this
useless thing'. Looks like we can split people
on
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into
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two parts. Ones who believe that
money
is the best option. And ones who
thinks
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think
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that the personal
gift
is more convenient as a
gift
.
Lets
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Let's
Let us
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try to justify each side of the question. Why
money
could be more
usefull
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useful
for teenagers?
Money
could be converted to anything, so it's a big plus.
Also
,
money
could help achieve goals that no one knows.
Disadvatange
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Disadvantage
Disadvantages
of gifting
money
could be silly spending of it. On the other side personal
gift
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gifts
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could create unique memories. If you know the person very well you can
gift
a
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them a
him a
her a
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usefull
Correct your spelling
useful
thing. Giving
particular
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a particular
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gift
to someone saves him from wasting
money
on bad things.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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