Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
We can often hear from friends 'Why did you give him it? It would be better for you to
gift
him money
instead
of this
useless thing'. Based on this
I think we can split all the people into two parts. The ones who believe that money
is the best option. And the ones who think that the personal gift
is more convenient as a gift
. Let's try to justify each side of the question. Why money
could be more useful for anyone, including teenagers? We can say
easily see that Verb problem
apply
money
could
be converted Wrong verb form
can
to
almost anything. Change preposition
into
Definitely
Add a comma
Definitely,
this
is the advantage of gifting the money
. Also
, the money
could help achieve the goals that no one knows except the person who were
given the Change the verb form
was
money
. That works especially for teenagers, because quite often we don't
know their wishes a priory
. So, summing everything up, we can say that gifting the Correct your spelling
priority
money
provides more freedom. On the other side gifting the money
could have the
disadvantages too. Teenagers can spend them quite fast on things they don'Correct article usage
apply
t
need or buy something that can be dangerous for them to use. For example
guns, drugs, cigarettes etc. Despite of
all Change preposition
apply
freedom
that Correct article usage
the freedom
money
provides personal gift
can be used to create unique memories. Fix the agreement mistake
gifts
Also
, if you know the person very well you can gift
a useful thing and it will be surprising. We can't
point out that giving a particular gift
to someone saves him from wasting money
on bad things. In conclusion, I think both money
and particular
thing could be a good Correct article usage
a particular
gift
. If you don't
know what you should buy for anyone you can always split into
two parts.Correct pronoun usage
it into
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite