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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the important part of life is a
work
. In general,
w
ork
Suggestion
the work
divides on two kinds: paid and unpaid. Some people believe that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid
work
 in their free time to help the local
community
, while others disagree. I think, it has b
enefit
Suggestion
benefits
for both the individual teenagers and society;
however
, people should not restrict the rights of teenagers and
use
 them
instead
 of salary workers. On the one hand, it is a good opportunity for teenagers help the local
community
. I think, they can find several hours per week to do something;
for example
, cut the trees, collect garbage or painting fence. In
this
 case, teenagers will know that it is their common home and they will take care about it. Teenagers can meet new good friends to spend their leisure time together.
In addition
,
this
work
 should be unpaid to people to feel the importance of the social part of it.
Moreover
, the local
community
 can save money for developing their district;
for example
, they can build new playgrounds for children.
On the other hand
, the local
community
 can
use
 teenagers
instead
 of h
ire
Suggestion
hiring
hired
workers for some kind of works. They can
use
 students in their private aims and save money for themselves. In
this
 case, the government should control the local
community
 and not allow any discrepancy with the law. I think, teenagers should know about all kind of agreed works that they can do for the local
community
 to avoid injustice. In conclusion, it is a good practice to require teenagers f
or
Suggestion
to
work
 to help the local
community
. They will take care about e
nvironment
Suggestion
the environment
and elderly people as well. I think,
this
 type of
work
 should be voluntary to involve more and more teenagers.
In addition
, the local
community
 should follow the rules and prevent to
use
 of teenagers for their own purposes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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