it is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree with this view?

#technology #cultures #tradition

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Nowadays, technology

technology

plays a key role in our life, everything in

reacent

new

recent

resent

days linked with

technolgy

the practical application of science to commerce or industry

technology

while

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While

some people

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

believes

belief

that

technology

will destruct traditional methods. In my

opinion both

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opinion, both

technology

and traditional can

coexistance

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coexist

coexistence

existence

co-existence

together in the present and future. On the one hand, the

technology

system

approched

move towards

approached

approaches

deaply

to a great depth psychologically

deeply

deploy

in our

life

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life, for

for

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instance, these

days

every one

all people

everyone

communicate each other throughout the world due to

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the development

development

technology

facebook

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Facebook

and so on. And

also

the

technology

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is used

for

bussiness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

business

businesses

people using

technology

for emails and fax.

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some negative impacts

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these

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advanced

technology

like most of the younger generations addicted to these social

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media

and televisions.

On the other hand

, in some counties

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used for awareness on traditions and

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through televisions.

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example china has launched some

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broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects

television

programs to

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make familiar or conversant with

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Topic Vocabulary:

inevitable
traditional cultures
incompatible
technological advancements
cultural preservation
historical heritage
globalization
hybridization
digital divide
cross-cultural interaction
economic incentives
generational perspectives
disruption
cultural identity
evolution of tradition
cultural resilience
heritage conservation
information technology
multiculturalism
cultural assimilation

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it is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries there are more yung people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Even after the Covid-19 pandemic is over, some companies are thinking of using a hybrid approach when it comes to working from home and on-site. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working on-site? Write at least 250 words.

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that they should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.