it is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Nowadays, technology

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plays a key role in our life, everything in

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new

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will destruct traditional methods. In my

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and traditional can

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like most of the younger generations addicted to these social

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, in some counties

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used for awareness on traditions and

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to enhance the

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may dominate the traditional

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growth will not

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and rituals.

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Topic Vocabulary:

inevitable
traditional cultures
incompatible
technological advancements
cultural preservation
historical heritage
globalization
hybridization
digital divide
cross-cultural interaction
economic incentives
generational perspectives
disruption
cultural identity
evolution of tradition
cultural resilience
heritage conservation
information technology
multiculturalism
cultural assimilation

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it is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Fully explain your ideas

Now a days, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacation. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage students . Do you think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages?