In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can you deal with those causes?

Nowadays, there is an increasing in the rate of

crime

, whether it is committed or not, but it still affects many victims and people who involve with the situations. There are several reasons and causes of

crime

that can be clarified throughout

this

essay. In

this

essay, I will be discussing about the causes of

crime

To begin

with, there are several causes for people to commit

crime

First

, it may

also

happen because of the economy. People who live in the countries that have large gaps between rich and poor people may experience

crime

more often than countries that people are treated equally.

This

is because people who live under pressure

for example

, unemployment people, they may not have enough money to take care of themselves and their families. With

this

reason, it drives some of them to commit

crime

such

as stealing, robbing and using violence.

Second

of all, apart from the economy, personal feeling and thought

also

contribute to people who do something badly.

For instance

, to commit

crime

, the criminal can just feel jealous or hate the victims so they use violence against the person.

Besides

, criminals can receive an order from someone else and do it for people who are in the upper position or their bosses.

However

, there are many solutions that can be made to prevent these unwanted situations.

First

, governments should assure that their citizens are treated and lived equally, so no one is abandoned and suffered from the economy.

For example

, the government may try to provide extra classes for people to gain more skills in order to find jobs that are suitable for them.

Secondly

, people who relevant should make laws effective, in

this

case, they have to punish people who commit

crime

and take it seriously. In conclusion, the main causes of

crime

should be mentioned by people because it can drive to the proper solutions, which should not only be made by the governments, but

also

people who relevant to the situations as well.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

336 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.5

Complete response

8.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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economic disparity
propensity
recidivism
deterrent
rehabilitative
judicial system
corruption
socioeconomic
alienation
stigmatization
decriminalization
enforcement
gentrification
preemptive measures
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