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An increasing number of people are changing their careers. What are the reasons? Do you think it is positive or negative?

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Seeking for reasons why job-hopping is more commonly seen today, the answer can be various. From my perspective, it is obviously more beneficial to employees, nor organizations. Admittedly, many people change jobs because of looking for other opportunities in their careers, or changing career directions. So that, they are able to learn new skills, meet new people,
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 to challenge themselves.
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, people who change work frequently have a better evaluation
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of
 their own market values, since they are always in the market, from which, they can easily identify their merits and demerits for
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 development.
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, financial issue is
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 a desirable factor
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for
 many people. It is reasonable if people hunting for high-wage job positions to gain a better living quality.
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 people obtaining a range of
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benefits, from
 job-hopping, its drawback by losing skilled and well-trained employees for organizations is clear.
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, if people changing works extremely frequent, will be seen as less loyal to employers. Emphasized in many
organization
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organizational
 cultures, loyalty is essential to evaluate
responsibility
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the responsibility
 of employees, which is
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 a basic trait in personality. In conclusion, choosing a different career path gives more opportunities
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for
working class
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the working class
. More importantly, organizations should improve
working environment
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the working environment
working environments
 and provide job promotions to meet
staff job satisfaction
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the staff job satisfaction
, so that to keep their wanted employees.

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