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Every country has poor people and every country has different way of dealing with the poor.What are some of the reasons for poverty and what can we do to help the poor. Give reasons for your answer and include any example from your knowledge and experience.

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In today’s time, more and more people are having high disposable income for luxury items. But in every country, there are people who struggle to support their
day
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 to
day
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 living and
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 applies not only to developing or
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 nation but
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to
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in
 developed countries around the
world
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. There are
number
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a number
 of reasons for
poverty
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 and it varies from country to country. But generally, the main reason for
poverty
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 in
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 and developing countries is over population which in turn creates unemployment. Because of
high number
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the high number
 of unemployed people in
family
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the family
a family
, the income of that family is not sufficient for
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 to
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 living and
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 gives rise to
poverty
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. To tackle the issue of
over population
too much population
overpopulation
, Government should take firm steps to control population, create awareness about family planning, and create more employment opportunities. The other reason for
poverty
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 is that there are no guidelines about minimum wage in many countries around the
world
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 and
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 leads to people earning very less in
comparision
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
 to expenses that they incur to support their basic
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 to
day
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 needs. The solution to
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 problem is firm implementation of
minimum wage concept
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the minimum wage concept
 across the
world
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.
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 Government should pay allowances to unemployed. The major reason of
poverty
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 in
developed
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developing
 countries is inflation and high standard of living. In
this
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 case,
Government
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the Government
 should curb the inflation and bring down the cost of living so that a person with low earning can
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 support his/her family. To conclude, I think Governments across the
world
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 should play a more active role in the society to bring a change and to eliminate
poverty
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.
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