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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree?

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The media promotes celebrities in order, to be famous and to be benefited, by increasing the number of viewers. A celebrity can be a singer, a dancer or an actor. Local celebrities are different compared to international celebrities. Celebrity in an Asian country blends the culture with their role act, which is not an adverse for the society.
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, European celebrities pose with fashion and lifestyle, which don’t suit Asian countries. Children are in a stage of creativity and move towards adventures, with an interest to grasp something new always. Most frequently, children imitate their parents or a saint if they are catholic. As children have a role model
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, they are on an accurate path and will admit good behaviour. Nowadays children don’t interact with their parents or neither pay attention on religious activities. Children are more often engaged with mobile phones or electronic devices or if devices are prohibited, they will be attracted to television.
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, followed by the influence in these devices, they are attracted to people they encounter on
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 devices. As children are in search of something new, they start imitating the celebrities. They enter a new dimension, where they would not obey their parents and do nasty things which is not accepted by the society. It is obvious that,
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 celebrities give a bad impact for children. Children should be kept away from media and electronic devices, until the children are grown up and in a state, with awareness of ethical standards.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity culture
  • Glamorization
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Self-esteem
  • Scandals
  • Role models
  • Moral development
  • Mental health
  • Influence
  • Exposure
  • Social media platforms
  • Charity work
  • Inappropriate behavior
  • Perfection image
  • Negative impact
  • Inspire children
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