A lot of peoplle think that children should work or travel after finishing school and start study in university but others think they should work.

Some people say it is
good thing
Suggestion
a good thing
to don'
t
work
or travel after
gradueting
receive an academic degree upon completion of one's studies
graduating
graduation
school
and begin study at
universities but
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universities, but
other people think
thay
pointing out something
that
in today's world it is important to
work
and you will learn to be independent Everything has two sides
first let's
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first, let's
look to some benefit sides of don'
t
work
between graduating
school
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
bwgi
a small lightweight carriage; drawn by a single horse
buggy
studying in universities
this
is good tnink
Suggestion
is good thinking
is good think
about only
studying for
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studying, for
examlpe our
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example, our
example our
grandfather Alisher Navoiy decided to travel after graduating
school
but his dad said you have to study hard and he became
great and marvellous writer
Suggestion
a great and marvellous writer
.
Secondly if
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Secondly, if
you don'
t
work
you can study perfect in university because you don'
t
think about money or about other things.
On the other hand
it has some negative sides of don'
t
working
Suggestion
work
after finishing
school
because sometimes it is perfect to
work
because of
anumber
Suggestion
a number
of reasons and you will be independent
for
instance one
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instance, one
of the most talented inventor Thomas Alva Edison travel a lot after finishing
school
and became a
legendary
Suggestion
legend
and of course we will feel
responsibility
Suggestion
responsible
for example
one man said when we feel responsibility we can be an independent. To sum up despite the fact it is
great idea
Suggestion
a great idea
because balance of life. I hold the view that everything have to on their own place

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