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Stores should sell local food products and not imported food products. Do you agree or disagree

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Stores
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Stores'
 should sell local
food
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 products and not imported
food
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 products. Do you The sales of foreign
food
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 products by stores should be discouraged while locally produced ones ought to be patronized. I admit that purchasing native
food
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 products is healthier for human consumption and more affordable Perhaps one good reason why
this
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 should be promoted is that people get to eat healthy
food
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. Locally produced
food
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 products do not contain preservatives: artificial colouring, sweeteners and chemicals, which foreign manufacturers use to preserve their goods. In other
wards
the words that are spoken
words
, consuming more of organic produce protects people from certain health issues commonly found in our environment these days: obesity, hypertension, diabetes. A clear example is my
grand father
the father of your father or mother
grandfather
, who is 95 years old. He prefers meals prepared with fresh products from the farm.
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 has made him live healthy and strong without associated co- morbidities.
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, consuming native, fresh products can make individuals live a good life.
Affordability
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The affordability
 of these products is a good reason why individuals should
to buy
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buy
 them. When stores purchase at
cheaper rate
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cheaper rates
a cheaper rate
 from peasant farmers, they re-sell at considerable price to the populace. People from different class can afford to buy them comfortably, and would not have to spend so much on them.
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, Shoprite, a popular mall in Nigeria, sells fresh fruits at good rates.
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 can be attributed to the fact that these fruits
are bought
Suggestion
buy
 from local farmers in larger quantities, and at convenient price. In conclusion, if
selling
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the selling
 of native
food
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 produce in stores would benefit the people because it is less expensive and healthy,
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this
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 should be highly encouraged in our society.
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