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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#schools #government
Private
school
 system
become
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becomes
 more and more
popluar
regarded with great favor, approval, or affection especially by the general public
popular
people
 in the modern world.Considering the ideal that government should support
money
 for these specialized schools may not be necessary. From one side, student study of these
school mostly come
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schools, mostly comes
schools mostly come
schools mostly comes
school mostly comes
 from wealthy families.As we know
,
Accept space
,
tuition fee for private schools is exclusively higher than state schools.So why nation funding should waste
money
instead
 of using for more important specifies
such
 as medical. In
VietNam
a communist state in Indochina on the South China Sea; achieved independence from France in 1945
Vietnam
,
car
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a car
 is something so expensive and families
have
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to have
 it usually wealthy.At private schools
,
Accept space
,
tram traffic from
stocking
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stock
 car before
school gate
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the school gate
is easily catch
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easily catches
 up here.Beside supporting
money
 from other countries to
this
systems
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system
 is enormous.
Basicly
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Basically
 teaching's equipments which use for studying usually the newest
mordel
a hypothetical description of a complex entity or process
model
models
modal
 system.Beside we
can found
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can find
 it in any
school
 in the world.
Furthermore
, teachers do not look for our children like the way state systems have done
for
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in
.
However
,
Accept space
,
speciallize
developed or designed for a special activity or function
specialized
specialist
specialised
 schools provide a lot of good habit for young generation.As we can see
,
Accept space
,
children from these schools normally good at self-development
,
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,
cooperation and
this
 may be missed out from public systems.In fact
,
Accept space
,
 using
money
 for upgrade traffic situations is a better option.
In contrast
,
Accept space
,
rainy season is a nightmare for every
people
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person
 in Vietnam.Water all over the street
,
Accept space
,
traffic goes down people take an hour to get to the destination.
Otherwise
,
Accept space
,
purchasing
for
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of
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
 equipments in
health career
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a health career
health careers
.Many mercy problems had happened because of
inadaquate
lacking the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
inadequate
 technique. In conclusion, I do not agree with spending government funding in these
speciallized
developed or designed for a special activity or function
specialized
specialised
 schools
.
Accept space
.
From my point of view
,
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,
using for public schools develop
maybe
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may be
 a good
ideal
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idea
.Improving higher education of own country will give a chance for higher country's
developing
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development
developer
.
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