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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Private
school
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 system
become
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becomes
 more and more
popluar
regarded with great favor, approval, or affection especially by the general public
popular
people
 in the modern world.Considering the ideal that government should support
money
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 for these specialized schools may not be necessary. From one side, student study of these
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school mostly come
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schools, mostly comes
schools mostly come
schools mostly comes
school mostly comes
 from wealthy families.As we know
,
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,
tuition fee for private schools is exclusively higher than state schools.So why nation funding should waste
money
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instead
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 of using for more important specifies
such
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 as medical. In
VietNam
a communist state in Indochina on the South China Sea; achieved independence from France in 1945
Vietnam
,
car
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a car
 is something so expensive and families
have
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to have
 it usually wealthy.At private schools
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,
tram traffic from
stocking
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stock
 car before
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school gate
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the school gate
is easily catch
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easily catches
 up here.Beside supporting
money
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 from other countries to
this
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systems
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system
 is enormous.
Basicly
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Basically
 teaching's equipments which use for studying usually the newest
mordel
a hypothetical description of a complex entity or process
model
models
modal
 system.Beside we
can found
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can find
 it in any
school
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 in the world.
Furthermore
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, teachers do not look for our children like the way state systems have done
for
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in
.
However
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,
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,
speciallize
developed or designed for a special activity or function
specialized
specialist
specialised
 schools provide a lot of good habit for young generation.As we can see
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children from these schools normally good at self-development
,
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,
cooperation and
this
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 may be missed out from public systems.In fact
,
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,
 using
money
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 for upgrade traffic situations is a better option.
In contrast
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,
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,
rainy season is a nightmare for every
people
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person
 in Vietnam.Water all over the street
,
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,
traffic goes down people take an hour to get to the destination.
Otherwise
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,
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,
purchasing
for
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of
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
 equipments in
health career
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a health career
health careers
.Many mercy problems had happened because of
inadaquate
lacking the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
inadequate
 technique. In conclusion, I do not agree with spending government funding in these
speciallized
developed or designed for a special activity or function
specialized
specialised
 schools
.
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.
From my point of view
,
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,
using for public schools develop
maybe
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may be
 a good
ideal
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idea
.Improving higher education of own country will give a chance for higher country's
developing
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development
developer
.
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