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Band 7.5

Certain urban regions face considerable traffic congestion. Explore the root causes of this problem and suggest possible solutions. wirte at least 250 words.

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Today, all over the world, some countries have an issue with the significant amount of
traffic
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due to
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 population density. I will discuss the underlying causes of
this
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 problem and strategies that can be adopted to resolve it. 
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there are several reasons, but the most important ones are that all major companies are located in one area, leading to
traffic
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 congestion during regular office hours as people commute, which sometimes causes delays in their arrival.
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, the time that you will take to go to work in Riyadh city is more than 3 hours.
Secondly
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, another reason is designing and building
roads
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 that do not effectively support
traffic
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 flow or accommodate vehicles of all sizes, including bus stops,
along with
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 having multiple exits on the main
roads
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.
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, Highway 40 is a main road link between east and west of Saudi Arabia. It has a high level of
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due to
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 the numerous exits and old design of the
roads
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.
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, solving
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 can be approached through three strategies: upgrading physical infrastructure to increase the design capacity of
roads
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 and decreasing daily vehicles by encouraging the use of public transportation
such
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 as trains and buses.
Also
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 developing guidelines for road users, which may include promoting remote work and education,
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 implementing tunnels or bridges under and above
roads
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 with high
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 density. 
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 , In several nations, high population densities cause severe
traffic
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 jams during business hours. Delays result from the concentration of large corporations in one location. Poor road design and construction lead to problems with
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 flow. Renovating infrastructure, promoting public transit, creating user guidelines, and constructing tunnels or bridges beneath busy roadways are some ways to alleviate
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. By addressing these problems, daily car utilization can be decreased and
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traffic
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 management can be improved.
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general
Be sure to proofread to fix small grammatical errors and improve sentence structure. Consider the use of transitions for smoother flow between ideas.
task achievement
Expand on specific examples to give a clearer picture. Incorporate additional relevant data to support your points, making them more persuasive.
introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, ensuring that the reader understands both the problem and proposed solutions.
complete response
Your exploration of multiple causes of traffic congestion shows a comprehensive understanding of the issue.

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