Some museums have an admission charge while some do not. In my opinion, the drawbacks of an entrance fee are eclipsed by its benefits in the sense that the income will be ploughed back into operation and development of the museums.

Nowadays, there are many museums charge fees for entrance while some do not.
Although
the benefit of admission is that help the government develop museums, but the drawback will outweigh due to the declining number of visitors. On the one hand, one of the main reasons which is considered as a benefit of
this
entrance fees is
making
engage in
doing
a fund to improve museums. In order to develop the historical places, paying for entrance is necessary.
This
means that, money is collected from visitors, which use for operations, sanitation services, or so on, leading to improving the qualities of tour that makes visitors more enjoy when
attend
achieved or reached
attained
.
For example
, to reduce the boredom of history exhibition, video clips or 3D screens about the historical events.
On the other hand
, the positive drawback is reducing the number of visitors.
Moreover
, since museums play a vital role for educational and historical value, charge for admissions which make difficult for poor people to visit. In fact, there
are many of students
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are many students
, who cannot afford to pay for that
fees
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fee
,
as a result
, a lot of pupils who visits for study purposes will decline.
For instance
, when I was the 5th grade, my teacher organized a tour to visited
War Remnants
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the War Remnants
Museum in Ho Chi Minh city, my class had to pay 300 thousand dong for 25 students while travel fees
were
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had been
have been
just 100 thousand dong. In conclusion, the advantage of an admission fee is overshadowed by the disadvantage.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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