You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter give details of the camera and where you bought it explain what has happened say what you want him/her to do about it

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Dear Malik, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing

this

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letter to inform you about a product (digital

camera

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) bought from your overseas store

while

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I was

traveling

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in India. The product that I bought is that SONY DSLR

Camera

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. I always try to capture my every moment of

traveling

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travelling

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to the destination which is why I always prefer digital cameras with modern features. I bought

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device for 1500 USD having a 5-year replacement warranty in case any parts are damaged or not functioning. Recently, I observed that the shutter button of my device is not responding well. Once I click on the shutter button to capture the picture, it shows one piece of information in the

camera

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display "Check the shutter button". I have tried to check and identify the initial problem but nothing has been found to fix

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issue. As you are providing after-sales service for any product you sell, I am expecting that I will get the proper solution regarding the problem that I am having with the

camera

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that I bought from your store. Looking forward to your kind solution and feedback regarding

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matter. Thanking you, Faisal

faisalmahamoodFri Nov 17 2023

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Task Achievement

Be sure to clearly address all three bullet points in the prompt. Your response has missed the third part, which is to clearly state what you want the representative to do about the missing items.

Task Achievement

Maintain a more consistent and formal tone throughout the letter, suited to the context of writing to a company representative.

Coherence and Cohesion

Organize your paragraphs more logically, each one expressing a single clear idea that progresses the letter appropriately.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use more formal closing salutations. Avoid casual or informal language in this type of correspondence.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

200 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

local representative
important items missing
purchase details
model and brand
missing accessories
inconvenience
use to its full extent
urgent request
partial refund
alternative solution
exchange unit
correct the issue
look forward to your prompt response

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