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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Learning more than national
language
 is always plus point in everyone's life. Additional
language
 opens the door
to understand
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to understanding
 someone beyond the boundary of our own culture, ethnicity and nationality. But, learning the
language
 that doesn't belong to ourself can be tiresome and frustrating. That's why some suggests to teach foreign
language
 in primary school.
First
 of all,
study
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a study
the study
have shown
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has shown
 that kids in their early stage of life tend to learn
language
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languages
the language
a language
 easily in comparison to adult.
This
 is because the brain of young kid is in developing stage and its easier to grasp new words in that early stage.
In addition
, kids have enough spare time to learn while a grown up person have other priorities.
However
, learning two languages at simultaneously while in
kid
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the kit
the kid
 can sometimes cause mixing of words from different languages can
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 cause
problem
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problems
a problem
the problem
.
For example
, an English who is introduced to Spanish
language
 can sometime mid words from same
Language
.
This
 can cause serious inaccuracies in grammar.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, kids with no proficiency in either
language
 is not an expected result. In conclusion, it's
best time
Suggestion
the best time
 to introduce secondary
language
 to kid when he completely understand his/her own
language
. So that, there would be no any confusion between two languages.

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