It is believed that young people are more interested in international pop singers and movie stars then in history and historical people.why is this?

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It is generally seen that everyone changes their interest from

time

Similarly

, in these days young blood people fond of listening to foreign

music

and

also

watch foreign movies.

However

, they do not like gain knowledge about

history

and about freedom fighters. In my upcoming writing

Accept space

I will delineate both aspects followed by my conclusion.

To begin

with, there are many reasons why people like to listen to foreign

music

, but in which one of the most significant that impacts of technology on individuals.

Such

as, nowadays it is very easy to listen to foreign

music

. So youngsters influenced by them and consider a role model.Apart from

this

, youngsters get bored when they instantly listen single

music

and

then

to change their mind they try something new like watch and listen international artists.

On the other hand

, people

also

do not want to learn about our ancient

time

. They opine that learn

history

, useless to them because present scenario is very different than the past.

Also

, they show their interest in science subjects which indirectly divert the mind of youngsters from learning

history

Moreover

, our

history

is vast many people did sacrifice.

Hence

, youngsters confused when they try to come to know about the life of freedom fighters due to

this

they do not like spending

time

on learn

history

Suggestion

o conclusion, it is true that due to globalisation mostly youngsters fond to follow to international artists

instead

learn about their culture

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

243 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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It is believed that young people are more interested in international pop singers and movie stars then in history and historical people.why is this?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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