Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#meat #health

We see an increasing number of people who prefer the vegetables over the

meat

. Almost everyone is proud to share

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information through

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social services nowadays, but as we may know from our ancestors diversity in the

ration

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is crucial for

surviving

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. So, let's discuss in detail whether is good or not to be a vegetarian. Consuming a lot of red

meat

can cause

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various

kind

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of diseases. It

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few

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modern researches showing us a positive correlation between the

consuming

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rate of

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red

meat

and the rate of

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cancer diseases. Through these

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researchers are trying to tell us that we should decrease the amount of red

meat

in our daily diet and include more plant-based meals. So, if we believe in

this

, it looks like if we decrease the amount of

meat

we would stay healthy for a longer period of our life. Despite

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the results of the previous experiments we don'

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that

support

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plant-based

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diet. It doesn'

look like having only the plants on our kitchen table is good either. And it is likely true. We shouldn'

exclude all animal-based products from our ration. We can easily get problems with our health because of it.

Also

, if you are doing a lot of exercises it is really hard to grow a muscle mass without

protein based

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nutrition. I think that full denial from

meat

can'

be a good thing for us.

Balance

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between plant-based and animal-based nutrition is important.

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2Word repetition
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays, some older people choose to live in the retirement communities with other people, rather than living with their adult children.

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