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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this.

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Nowadays, some countries have introduced anti-
tobacco
 laws in order
to prevent
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prevent
 health issues among their citizens, while others completely ignore that problem because they think that it is a personal choice and no governmental regulation in
this
 area is required. Personally, I believe that
tobacco
 users should be banned from smoking at work or in other public facilities as it is harmful to others’ health. Some countries follow the rule that people should have freedom in their choices, and it is not legitimate to restrict
tobacco
 usage to any extent. Citizens of those think that their personal right to smoke is more important than others right to be healthy.
As a result
, it is totally acceptable in these countries to smoke in restaurants, offices or even schools.
For example
, there are many cafes in
Vienna where
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Vienna, where
 only smoking areas exist because of the
tobacco
 companies’ lobby. Despite being totally acceptable in some places, smoking in public areas is banned in many countries all over the world because it is dangerous for people’s health. Many scientific researchers claim that cigarette fumes cause a range of diseases which leads to serious injuries and death even for passive smokers. It illustrates that society should be protected from the harmful influence of
tobacco
 burning products in order to make it healthier. A vivid example of
this
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draw someone's attention away from something
distracting
 effect is that if employees inhale cigarette smoke during their working day, there is an increased risk for them to develop serious diseases
such
 as lung cancer. To conclude, it is scientifically proven that passive smoking is as harmful as a direct consumption of cigarettes, and the government should not allow smoking in public places even if some countries still allow that.

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