Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

When discussing the effects of international business transactions and their influence on the country's nationality, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue.
Although
some believe that increasing cultural contacts with
outher
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
places in positive,
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
it increases the diversity and
accessability
the quality of being at hand when needed
accessibility
of different products to the local market, others believe it leads to the
lose
something that is lost
loss
of the national identity. In my opinion, international relationships have a negative impact on the local society and should be prevented. In
this
essay, I will provide examples and arguments to support my opinion. One argument in favour of my view is that by allowing international companies to access the local market, domestic businesses might lose
substantial amount
Suggestion
a substantial amount
of money.
This
can lead to the closure of local factories and an increase in the rate of unemployment. As an example, 15 years ago, the American government permitted the import of European cars. In the following 7 years, the local car industry lost more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
10% of their earnings
,
Accept space
,
and was forced
to fired
Suggestion
to fire
10,000 employees.
This
example
show
Suggestion
shows
, that international business interaction can have a negative
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
on the local financial market. Another reason to support my opinion, is that by teaching children new languages, international words are being incorporated into the local dialect, leading to the
lose
something that is lost
loss
of the local
language
vocabulary.
For example
, a recent study by the Jerusalem Univeristy published in 2014, found that more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
20,000 words in the Hebrew
language
have been replaced by international words, since the English
language
was
incorportaed
formed or united into a whole
incorporated
into the educational system.
This
demonstrates, that multiculturalism can change our
language
, and
effect
have an effect upon
affect
the richness of our native tongue. In conclusion, I maintain that increasing business and cultural interactions with other countries, have a severe effect on our society and should be prevented. We should learn to cherish our community, for the good and bad.
Submitted by chilafp on

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