Currently, many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives.What are the problems and solutions ?

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IN THE PRESENT

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, IDIVIDUALS ARE LACKING BEHIND IN MAINTANING BALANCE BETWEEN PROFESSIONAL AND FAMILY LIFE.

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ESSAY WILL DISCUSS ABOUT HOW INFATION AND INCREASED WORKLOAD AT OFFICE AFFECT THE OTHER PARTS OF THE LIVES AND

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, IMLIMENTING SOME NEW LAW THROUGH GOVERNMENT AND PRIORTISE WORK EFFECTIVELY HELP THE IN REDUCING

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ISSUE. ON THE

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HAND, THE PRIME REASON FOR IMBALANCE IN PERSONAL AND PROFESSIONAL IS THAT PEOPLE

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UNABLE TO CO-OP THE BALANCE IN BETWEEN BECAUSE OF THE INFLATION. TO ILLUSTRATE, EVERYBODY HAVE THE DESIRE TO FULFILL THEIR CHILDREN, PARENTS, WIFES WISHES. BUT DUE TO INFLATION THEY ARE UNCAPABLE TO FULFILL.

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, THEY HAVE TO WORK HARD AND DO OVERTIME WORK EVENTHOUGH THEY ARE TIRED OR ILL AND SO ON. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY FATHER WAS A LECTURER IN THE SECONDARY SCHOLLD IN INDIA. AND WE WERE 4 CHILDREN AND MY MOTHER FOR WHOM HE HAS TO EARN MONEY TO FEED US. SO HE USED TO DO LOTS OF WORK AND

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RUNNING SIDE BUSINESS OF THE FINANCE. BECAUSE OF

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TWO WORKS HE WAS NOT HAVING WAS NOT HAVING ENOUGH

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TO SPEND WITH US. IT IS NOT THAT MY FATHER DID NOT WANT BUT HE DID NOT HAVE ANONTHER CHOICE EXCCEPT MULTIPLE WORKS.

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, I SUGGEST THAT IF PERSON POPELRY PRIORITISE HIS POR HER WORK THAN IT IS POSSIBLE TO COOPERATE WITH BOTH LIVES. TO ELABORATE, WHEN

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CAN KNOW THAT WHICH IS THE MOST IMPORTANT WORK AT A

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LIKE, IF BOSS ASK TO STAY BACK AFTER AN OFFICE HOURS THAT

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HE SHOULD SAY NO BECAUSE HIS FAMILY AND LOVED ONES ARE WAITING.

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, GOVERNMENT SHOULD IMPLIMENT SOME NEW RULES LIKE WORKING MORE THAN 6 HOURS A DAY IS FORBIDDEN BECAUSE IF, IT IS A LAW,

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CAN FORCE THE EMPLOYEE TO WORK OUT OF THE LAW AND

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CAN ABLE TO GET SOME FREE

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TO SPEND SOME QUALITY

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WITH CLOSE FRIENDS ANF FAMILY. FOR AN EXAPMLE, IN FOREIGN COUNTRY THERE IS A RULE THAT YOU

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CAN NOT WORK MORE THAN 40 HOURS A DAY OFFICIALLY.

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EVERYONE IS HAVNING QULITY

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FOR FAMILIY.

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HOW THEY MAINTAIN THE BALANCE. TO SUM UP, IT IS TRUE THAT NO

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IS HAVING OTHER CHOICES ACCEPT WORKING MORE BUT IF IDIVIDUALS LEARN MANAGEMNT SKILLS LIKE

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MANAGEMENT

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PROBLES CAN BE OVERCOME.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

399 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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