Currently, many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives.What are the problems and solutions ?

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IN THE PRESENT

TIME

, IDIVIDUALS ARE LACKING BEHIND IN MAINTANING BALANCE BETWEEN PROFESSIONAL AND FAMILY LIFE.

FIRSTLY

THIS

ESSAY WILL DISCUSS ABOUT HOW INFATION AND INCREASED WORKLOAD AT OFFICE AFFECT THE OTHER PARTS OF THE LIVES AND

SECONDLY

, IMLIMENTING SOME NEW LAW THROUGH GOVERNMENT AND PRIORTISE WORK EFFECTIVELY HELP THE IN REDUCING

THIS

ISSUE. ON THE

ONE

HAND, THE PRIME REASON FOR IMBALANCE IN PERSONAL AND PROFESSIONAL IS THAT PEOPLE

ALSO

UNABLE TO CO-OP THE BALANCE IN BETWEEN BECAUSE OF THE INFLATION. TO ILLUSTRATE, EVERYBODY HAVE THE DESIRE TO FULFILL THEIR CHILDREN, PARENTS, WIFES WISHES. BUT DUE TO INFLATION THEY ARE UNCAPABLE TO FULFILL.

AS A RESULT

, THEY HAVE TO WORK HARD AND DO OVERTIME WORK EVENTHOUGH THEY ARE TIRED OR ILL AND SO ON. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY FATHER WAS A LECTURER IN THE SECONDARY SCHOLLD IN INDIA. AND WE WERE 4 CHILDREN AND MY MOTHER FOR WHOM HE HAS TO EARN MONEY TO FEED US. SO HE USED TO DO LOTS OF WORK AND

ALSO

RUNNING SIDE BUSINESS OF THE FINANCE. BECAUSE OF

THIS

TWO WORKS HE WAS NOT HAVING WAS NOT HAVING ENOUGH

TIME

TO SPEND WITH US. IT IS NOT THAT MY FATHER DID NOT WANT BUT HE DID NOT HAVE ANONTHER CHOICE EXCCEPT MULTIPLE WORKS.

ON THE OTHER HAND

FIRSTLY

, I SUGGEST THAT IF PERSON POPELRY PRIORITISE HIS POR HER WORK THAN IT IS POSSIBLE TO COOPERATE WITH BOTH LIVES. TO ELABORATE, WHEN

ONE

CAN KNOW THAT WHICH IS THE MOST IMPORTANT WORK AT A

TIME

LIKE, IF BOSS ASK TO STAY BACK AFTER AN OFFICE HOURS THAT

TIME

HE SHOULD SAY NO BECAUSE HIS FAMILY AND LOVED ONES ARE WAITING.

SECONDLY

, GOVERNMENT SHOULD IMPLIMENT SOME NEW RULES LIKE WORKING MORE THAN 6 HOURS A DAY IS FORBIDDEN BECAUSE IF, IT IS A LAW,

THEN

ONE

CAN FORCE THE EMPLOYEE TO WORK OUT OF THE LAW AND

ONE

CAN ABLE TO GET SOME FREE

TIME

TO SPEND SOME QUALITY

TIME

WITH CLOSE FRIENDS ANF FAMILY. FOR AN EXAPMLE, IN FOREIGN COUNTRY THERE IS A RULE THAT YOU

ONE

CAN NOT WORK MORE THAN 40 HOURS A DAY OFFICIALLY.

THUS

EVERYONE IS HAVNING QULITY

TIME

FOR FAMILIY.

THIS

HOW THEY MAINTAIN THE BALANCE. TO SUM UP, IT IS TRUE THAT NO

ONE

IS HAVING OTHER CHOICES ACCEPT WORKING MORE BUT IF IDIVIDUALS LEARN MANAGEMNT SKILLS LIKE

TIME

MANAGEMENT

THEN

THIS

PROBLES CAN BE OVERCOME.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

399 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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