Some people believe that success is about hard work and determination. Others think that success has a connection with money and personal appearance. Discuss both views. Give your opinion and some of your own experiences.

There is some controversy over whether some people believe that hard

work

and determination are the keys to success in life, others think that

money

and personal

appearance

attributes are more important. From my perspective, even though each apparently has its own

advantageous

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advantages

advantage

points, the latter, with some typically outstanding benefits is worth my preference. On the

one

hand, hard

work

and determination would be beneficial to some extent.

Firstly

, hard

work

means overcoming the weaknesses and shortcomings to gain valuable experiences.

For example

, Ronaldo is a famous football player in the world. At the beginning of his career, his innate potential was not appreciated and received recognized by coaches and media. In a consequence, after hours hitting the gym to improve physical strength and football skills and

one

of the most successful stars.

Secondly

,

endeavors

a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)

endeavours

give us to gain the goal in their life.

For instance

, Nguyen Ngoc Ki is a Vietnamese teacher. In the past, he could not write

by

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with

his hand.

However

, with endless efforts to practice writing

by

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with

his toes and hold the pen.

As a result

, he graduated from the Vietnamese university of Pedagogy and he has become

one

of the most respected teachers. Despite the above arguments, I subscribe to the notion that

money

and personal

appearance

play a more vital role because of its evidence advantageous points. The

first

reason is that

money

facilitates people to achieve more chances in their life. The most compelling evidence is that with

money

, people can have access to better

education

Accept comma addition

education, such

such

as studying abroad to enhance knowledge and qualification.

This

enables them to have a job opportunity and

work

prospect

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prospects

.

Moreover

, rich people can start their own business without loaning

money

from the bank.

In addition

,

appearance

is

one

of the crucial factors can get success. It creates a

first

impression towards business partners.

This

facilitates them to sign a contract worth millions of dollars. The

other

writes (books or stories or articles or the like) professionally (for pay)

author

illustrate

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illustrates

celebrity in acting and singing areas have

good physical

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a good physical appearance

appearance

can create the

first

impression towards fan or

audience

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the audience

. In consequence, while hard

work

and determination can bring some

favorable

encouraging or approving or pleasing

favourable

aspects, I would argue that financial and

appearance

should be regarded as a better option.