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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Although
 it is often believed that environmental issues ought to be resolved globally, some people think that solving them within a country is more proper. In my opinion, I consider that dealing with problems nationally makes a country to be independent, enhances their recognition and reduces their debts. On the one hand, taking care of environmental problems on a national scale strengthens a country, and makes her to become independent and I agree.
For instance
, it helps countries to know and understand their capabilities, and
thus
, prepares and strengthen them for future cases.
Moreover
, taking care of an issue by a nation can enhance their recognition internationally. To illustrate, the Nigerian government, in 2013/2014 was able to fight and eradicate Ebola disease without any support internationally, thereby becoming recognised worldwide, and some countries now seek their assistance whenever there is an epidemic.
Finally
, there would be reduced debts for countries who do not always seek help abroad.
This
 is because getting solutions on a global scale requires much funding.
On the other hand
, some believe that some countries are very poor and
therefore
 cannot deal with many difficult conditions.
In other words
, resolving most difficulties on a global scale would mean a great support for
such
 countries,
hence
, enhancing their growth.
For example
, if the outbreak of Ebola in Liberia was tackled globally, it would not have spread to other countries and claiming the lives of many important persons
such
 as Dr. Edith Adedayoo.
Furthermore
, corruptions in most developing countries, causes a delay in dealing with some difficult situations. To explain
further
, corrupt leaders usually appoint their fellows to work with,
thus
, embezzling most of the money allocated to granting solution to some issues without any query.
This
 is not obtainable when the globe is involved. In conclusion, notwithstanding people's varied opinions, I consider being free of debts, independence and worldwide recognition as good reasons why environmental conditions should be solved within the nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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