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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that it is needless to conserve wildlife, as it is a wasteful use of resources. I disagree with
this
 notion as I believe that
this
 idea is selfish and unethical. At the same time, its protection is entirely necessary.
To begin
 with, it is preposterous to argue over having no place for wild animals in
this
 century.
Since
Suggestion
For
 the past, humans and
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
 have been thriving together. So why suddenly, humans have now forgotten, without any compelling reason, except to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their own greed, that other stakeholders must be wiped out?.
For instance
, poaching, trophy hunting has been on
rise
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the rise
, bluntly disregarding the social beings that live in
such
 areas.
Furthermore
, it is savagely amoral to forcefully destroy the habitats of
fauna
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the fauna
, keeping personal interests over common welfare.
Thus
, it is a parasitic
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 to overtake, which was once a commonplace.
On the other hand
, I think that safeguarding these living beings is entirely necessary and saving them is a good use of resources.
Firstly
, they are an inspiration to decrease our environmental impact.
For example
, these creatures can invoke feelings of sympathy and compassion, causing people to be conscious of the damaging effects
to
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of
 their lifestyles.
Secondly
, they help to strike an ecological balance.
For instance
, the predators
on
Suggestion
at
 the top of the food chain, hunt the prey animals, which in turn check their population and at the same time save the essential plant life. In
this
 way, a balance is maintained in the food chain.
Thus
, saving these entities not only keep us in check of our living
styles but
Accept comma addition
styles, but
also
 helps to maintain ecological balance. In conclusion, I believe that it is acutely important to save the fauna to it is unprincipled to ever consider them as wasteful for us.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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