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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural backgrounds living together in the same country makes the country develop faster. Do you agree?

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People are always on
move
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the move
 and in constant search for new places since historical times. There is a belief that societies formed by people of different backgrounds and cultures tend to develop faster. I partially agree with the above statement and the essay below will discuss the pros and cons of
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 migration followed by a reasoned conclusion.
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 with, People move to different countries for many reasons
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 search of a job or better opportunities, to escape war or persecution, etc. The countries accepting the immigrants may benefit from the migration if migrants are well educated and can be an asset to the society rather than being a liability.
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, Canada is running an immigration program to attract a talented crowd to help the economy. But migrants that come from war-ridden countries or countries plagued with the
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 problems often become a headache for the welcoming nation.
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, the Cologne city in Germany saw the sexual harassment of 1000 girls by the Arabs and African immigrants.
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, though vibrant cultures and traditions reflect the secular values of the country, it is incumbent upon the immigrants to accept the law and order of the new nation. The new age fear of migrants stealing the jobs of natives or breaking law and order has resulted in xenophobia.
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 to
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, there are countries fully formed and developed by migrants who all co-exist in a peaceful environment and live by the constitution of the country. To conclude, though living with people with different cultural background and nationalities promotes
harmony but
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harmony, but
 every individual irrespective of their background should live by the constitution of the country.
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