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The
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 celebrities is not a new phenomenon. Throughout
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During history, youths have been inspired by people with outstanding athletic ability. It is argued that
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admiration
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 brings with it more positive than negative issues
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ramifications.
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 will be proven by looking at how sports figures both instill inspiration and teach life lessons to young people.
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, celebrities often display extremely developed skills, which can help to spur young people towards a life full of
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the physically active
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, school children are often driven to exercise in an attempt to become
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emulate superstars,
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 as Novak Djokovic, Ronaldo and Messi. As
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 additional exercise is good for their health, it is difficult to argue that the inspiration celebrities bestow
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leave upon young people is entirely a bad thing.
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 shows that the
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 people hold for sports stars has positive implications
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reasons.
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traits of many sports celebrities are often called into question, it is felt the public mistakes professional athletes make can act as good morality lessons for young people. A good image of
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 occurred when Canadian runner Ben Johnson
dishonorably
in a dishonorable manner
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 lost an Olympic gold medal due to steroid use.
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 incident showed young people around the world that drug use is a shameful practice. As
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is shown, often the public errors athletes commit can act as good lessons for adolescents. After looking at the above, it is felt to hold athletes in esteem does not bring with it entirely negative consequences. It is assumed the historical
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 people will retain
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retain for sports stars is not going to change
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