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Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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A number of people do not do well in early academic stages, yet they manage to have an outstanding performance in their career or other aspects of
life
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. In
this
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 essay I will explain the reasons for
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 phenomenon. After that, I will talk about the main criterion that a person needs to have in order to lead a successful
life
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. Success in
school
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do not reflect
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does not reflect
 success in real
life
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 for two reasons. The prime reason, is that
school
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 curriculums are designed to measure the
calssic
of recognized authority or excellence
classic
 perspective of
intelligence
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.
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, leaving other types of
intelligence
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 unmeasured, like athletic
intelligence
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, social
intelligence
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, music
intelligence
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 and business
intelligence
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. Another reason, is that students build different kinds of experiences in their early stages of
life
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, not only
school
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 related experiences.
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, a lot of successful
business men
the body of individuals who manage businesses
businessmen
 used to engage in business activities when they were teenagers, like Warren Buffet, which is a practice that was not intrigued nor recorded by their academic institutions. If I have to choose one criterion for a person to lead a successful
life
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, it would be being more prominent than his/her peers in one particular skill.
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 means, that a person who has an outstanding performance in creating something, and can accomplish it better than his/her peers, would have a greater chance of leading a
scuccessful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 career, even if these skills do not help him/her getting good grades in
school
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.
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, Leonel Messi was prominent in soccer.
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 he did not get good grades in
school
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, he is now considered to be more successful than most of his classmates, even the ones who got remarkably high marks. In conclusion, while I think it is important for people to get
good education
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a good education
, failure in
school
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 does not condemn them to
failure
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fail
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life
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. Schools are not designed to measure all aspects needed for success;
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furthermore
in addition
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, children and juveniles can accumulate different kinds of skills while growing up. One of these skills might end up being the skill that leads them to have a more successful career than their peers.
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