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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion?

#money #time
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In
this
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 rapidly changing world, individuals often go through the dilemma of paying more attention to their bank accounts or having more free
time
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 for themselves. For
this
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 reason, some people compromise with higher income while some bargain with leisure
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. I concur with the view that people should not negotiate with the quality of
life
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 for money. There are a majority of people who think having abundant money is the best way to live a
life
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. With better financial stability, they can provide a more luxurious and comfortable lifestyle
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 their loved ones with the cost of sacrificing their hobbies. The monetary benefits bring happiness and contentment to some people because of which they can provide quality education and health facilities
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 their families.
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Thus they
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Thus, they
 prioritize it in place of dedicating that
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 for leisure activities. At the same
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, some believe that spending long hours
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at
of
 work and having no
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 to actually enjoy is not the right approach to
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. They consider
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time
objective case of they
them
 to be a great equalizer and
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 spend at work cannot be purchased with money as it leads to stress and other health related problems. Living a healthier
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 and spending quality
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 with loved ones is more essential for people and many of them regret it later on in their
life
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. Indeed, many billionaires on their death bed remarked that they wished to have more
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 with their families. In my perspective, people should maintain a balanced
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 by giving equal
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 to work and personal
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. They will lead a more fulfilling lifestyle if they prioritize both factors equally. Focusing just on financial stability will make one
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dull, whereas
 not being productive has its own drawbacks.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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