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Science can increase people's lifespan for up to 100 years. There are projections that science may further increase the lifespan to 200 years. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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With the advancements in science and technology, many impossible things are now becoming practical and one of them is a longer lifespan. It is believed that the lifespan of an average human can be extended up to 200 years. As every invention have both sides,
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 and from that, they can work some extra years and can spend more time with family as compared to normal
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 span.
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, Scientists and other knowledgeable persons who have a piece of immense knowledge regarding specific fields can share their knowledge a bit longer with students who are under their tutelage.
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 approach can be beneficial to the students who want to study under experts. The aftermaths of living up to 200 years are not negligible. The
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 thing that humankind will face is the over-population since, with the longer
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 span, the mortality rate will decrease.
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 event will lead to an increasing need for resources which will lead to a high amount of pollution.
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, Huge numbers of humans can imbalance the natural eco-system which will create chaos in the earth and that will eventually lead the earth to the path of destruction. To wrap up, there are numerous benefits of living a long
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 the repercussions of it are more dangerous to society. So I think it is a good thing that we live with a normal lifespan.
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