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There are people who suffer from poverty in every country. What do you think the reasons for poverty are in your country and what do you think can be done to help these impoverished people?

#people #poverty #country
People
 around the world that want to learn a new
language
 can find some difficulties, in
order
 to learn it. The reality is many could be the reasons, to mention some of them the need to learn a new
language
,
people
 like to learn a new languages, and so on.
Therefore
; it is necessary to take into account
people
 learn in different ways, and
people
 have different intellectual profiles. In
order
 to contextualize the real problem that we have in our country, Colombia includes teaching
English
 from primary to secondary, in all the schools of the country, but many
students
 finish their schools, and they are not able to communicate in
English
. The implementation of programs in
order
 to achieve the
English
language
 involves all the schools, and one of those programs is called bilingual Colombia.
This
 plan pretends to 2025 every single student can communicate more easily, and they could get better opportunities of job, and, professional opportunities as well.
According to
 saber pro test, (2015) the results that showed that test was not enough. The
students
 of 11th
grade
 were not able to understand, the
English
language
. Even the average was not enough
according to
 expect it. Those could be a brief answer about the student´s
English
 learning, but in my point of view there is something more that the government had not taken into account.
According to
 Howard Garner human been has 7 multiple intelligences in which we found. Visual-spatial: it means
people
 with
this
 intelligent can draw, do jigsaw, puzzles, read maps, daydream, and many more. Those activities they can do easily. Bodily-kinesthetic: it involves use the body effectively, like a dancer, they like moving, making things, they communicate well through body
language
. Musical:
people
 with get
this
 intelligent show sensitivity to rhythm, and sound, they may study better with music. Interpersonal:
students
 can learn through interaction, they have many friends empathy for others, they can be taught through group activities, seminars, dialogues. Interpersonal: these learners tend to be shy, they have wisdom, intuition, and motivation,
as well as
 strong confidence. Linguistic:
people
 with
this
 intelligent like reading books, playing word games, making up poetry or stories, they often think in words. Logical Mathematical: they think conceptually, abstractly, and they like to experiment, solve puzzles, and ask comic questions. In mi point of view, and
according to
 the information mentioned before, there is something that really worry me. I can understand if the
students
 learn
English
 from first
grade
 to eleven
grade
,
at the end
 of their process in the school, they are not able to understand basic things in
English
. For that reason I would like to investigate which of those 7 multiple intelligences the
students
 of seventh
grade
 of John F Kennedy School need to develop a little bit more in
order
 to learn
English
 easier, and property. Is that what I will pretend to found out with
this
 proposal research.
This
 research arose because of the practice that I have been doing, throughout
this
 semester in the Jfk School,
grade
 seventh. I have been observing that situation. And I realized there are many
students
 with different abilities,

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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