Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People hold different views about whether unsafe activities should be prohibited. While I accept that the authorities ought to respect
civils’
applying to ordinary citizens as contrasted with the military
civil
rights, I believe that it is better to limit dangerous sports.
To begin
with, it is true that some individuals argue those activities which do not seem safe to players must be limited to some extent.
Firstly
, those sports might have adverse effects on physical aspects of players. To illustrate, bungee jumping or
skydiving
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sky diving
as two well-known activities among adolescents
are
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is
profoundly
distructive
causing destruction or much damage
destructive
.
In other words
, people who tend to try those types of sports are more likely to suffer from breaking or dislocating bones,
secondly
, regarding the huge number of injuries or casualties related to dangerous sport fields, it might impose
high amount
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a high amount
of medical care expenses on health sector’s shoulders in every country.
On the other hand
, some people claim that every government is responsible to devote attention to
human’s
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human
rights due to some reasons.
First
,
individuals’ attitude
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the individuals’ attitude
should be respected by policy makers because every person has various ways of thinking.
In addition
, sportsmen who are working on a specific field might have spent
majority
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the majority
a majority
of their time to become a professional player,
hence
the governments’ decision may destroy their lives, or they might suffer from mental diseases
such
as depression in the foreseeable future. In conclusion,
although
someone thinks that
authorities
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the authorities
ought to consider people’s freedom, in my opinion, engaging in harmful sport activities should not be allowed by governments in order to reduce the number of physical injuries, and minimizing the proportion of the spent budget
on
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for
medical care system
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the medical care system
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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