In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

Yes, I agree that teenager's shouldn't be going out without an adult company in the night time's in fact, when they are with someone
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
and matured enough,
saftey
the state of being certain that adverse effects will not be caused by some agent under defined conditions
safety
softy
softie
for that young kid won't be a big concern.
Firstly
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Firstly, this
this
essay will look into why is not safe to youngster's to go alone at late night.
Secondly
, I will explain how it would help them when they are accompanied by an adult.
Firstly
, the
soiecty
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
is filled with
lot
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lots
a lot
of
drug lord's
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the drug lord's
and sex predators who are targeting these kid's. As these youngster's are not matured enough to take a right decision they will fall in the trap of these
durg
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Durg
drug
dog
mafia people and
eventuallly
after an unspecified period of time or an especially long delay
eventually
, get
addited
compulsively or physiologically dependent on something habit-forming
addicted
to them which is not good for health. At the same time there is a lot of
chance
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chances
where they trap these young girl's and kidnap them for sex and other uses. For an example, in India a 16 year old girl was drugged and kidnapped,
then
she was rapped while is coming back alone from the college.
Secondly
, when these teens are accompanied by their father or a
gardian
a person who cares for persons or property
guardian
garden
they will ensure the safety of them and warn them when they find they are moving in a wrong path of life. As mentioned
before those
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before, those
bad people would not dare to do
such
things when they are with someone
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
. In conclusion, the 'curfew' which was imposed in US will help that
countrie's
teenagers
to be
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be
secure, stay out of drugs and other
malpratices
professional wrongdoing that results in injury or damage
malpractices
when they are with someone elder in the late night.

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  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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